"Give me a really good first line,
something I can sink my teeth into, that just pulls me in and makes me want to read more. For me, a really great first line raises a question in my mind, or, better yet, two or three, where I just have to read the book to find out.
A good first line gives me context about the story and lays a roadmap for where we're going."
Jennifer March Soloway
Senior Agent at the Andrea Brown Literary Agency
During an interview on the Writers with Wrinkles podcast
October 2024
Welcome! I'm so glad you stopped by.
I hope you find this collection of picture book first lines inspiring and motivational.
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Elements of a great first line
sets the scene of the story
hints at how the story will end
engages the reader
engages multiple senses
surprises the reader
makes the reader laugh
establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story
employs poetic devices
introduces the main character and their problem (bonus points if the character is particularly unusual)
makes the reader wonder something
sets the tone for the story
starts in the middle of the action
hints at a universal theme
uses unique formatting
references a beloved classic
hints at an unusual premise
introduces the concept
references something with universal appeal
uses a play on words
makes the reader feel something
hints at the main character's goal
A Credit Card
Takes Charge
Takes Charge
words by Kimberly Wilson, art by Mark Hoffman
Published by Page Street Kids
First line: Manufactured, mailed, and activated—Goldie charged into the wallet HOT.
Elements used: introduces the main character, employs poetic devices, engages multiple senses, starts in the middle of the action, uses a play on words, introduces a concept, establishes the setting of the story, and sets the tone for the story
Read Kimberly's first line revision journey here.
An Etrog From Across the Sea
Words by Kerry Olitzky and Deborah Bodin Cohen, art by Stacey Dressen McQueen
Published by Kar-Ben publishing
First line: July 1729 To my beloved wife and my dear children, Leah and Aaron, We have been blessed with calm seas across the Atlantic.
Elements used: Establishes the setting of the story and makes the reader wonder something and feel something
Mouse on the River: A Journey Thru Nature
By Alice Melvin
Published by Thomas & Hudson Ltd
First line: I set out from the woods in the first light of the day.
Elements used: makes the reader feel something
We Don't Eat Our Neighbors
By Daniel J. Mahoney
Published by Farrar Straus Giroux
First line: Libby and Herbert lived with their parents in a sloppy swamp.
Elements used: introduces the main characters, establishes the setting of the story and engages multiple senses
Maria Mariposa
Words by Karla Arenas Valenti, art by Ana Ramirez Gonzalez
Published by chronicle books
First line: One brand-new morning, in a brand-new city, on the very first day of a brand-new school, a gift arrived from Mexico.
Elements used: makes the reader feel something and wonder something
Out of the Blue
by Rebecca Bach-Lauritsen and Anna Margrethe Kjaergaard
(translated from Danish by Michael Favala Goldman)
Published by Enchanted Lion Books
First line: Suddenly there it was.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
The Goblin Twins
Words by Frances Cha, art by Jaime Kim
Published by Crown Books for Young Readers
First line: Doki and Kebi were only 601 years old.
Elements used: makes the reader feel something and surprises the reader
Harper Becomes a Big Sister
Words by Seamus Kirst, art by Karen Bunting
Published by Magination Press
First line: One, two, three. Dad, Daddy, and me.
Elements used: uses unique formatting, makes the reader feel something, and hints at a universal theme
Waiting to Welcome
Words by Samantha Cleaver and REuben Nantogmah, art by Bri Marie McNish
Published Feiwel and friends
First line: “The stranger is here!” Andani announces.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Meowl-O-Ween
Words by Diane Muldrow, art by Tiffany Chen
Published by Astra Young Readers
First line: When the moon’s a golden ball of yarn shining bright against the barn, and the crisp air makes us hurry-scurry, chasing after leaves a-flurry…Meowy Zowie!
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in, uses poetic devices, engages multiple senses, and makes the reader wonder something