September 2022
Every month, I check out 30 recently published picture books and share their first lines (and hooks, for NF).
Elements of a great first line
*makes the reader wonder something
*sets the tone for the story
*starts in the middle of the action
*hints at a universal theme
*establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story
*introduces the main character and their problem
(bonus points if the character is particularly unusual)
*subverts the reader's expectations
*makes the reader laugh
*sets the scene of the story
*hints at the how the story will end
*engages the reader
*engages multiple senses
*references a beloved classic
*hints at an unusual premise
*introduces the concept
*references something with universal appeal
*uses a play on words
Everything In Its Place
By Pauline David-Sax, art by Charnelle Pinkney Barlow
Published by Doubleday Books for Young Readers
First line: The bell rings and I push open the library door.
elements used: engages multiple senses and invokes the universal place of school
Big Truck Little Island
By Chris Van Dusen
Published by Candlewick Press
First line: Out on the ocean, one bright summer day, bound for an island, still five miles away, a tugboat was towing a truck on a barge—a truck that was hauling a load, extra large.
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in, makes the reader wonder something, and engages multiple senses
Extra Ezra
By Kara LaREau, art by Vincent X. Kirsch
Published by Harper
First line: Ezra always lets his light shine bright.
elements used: introduces the main character and makes the reader wonder something
to make
By Danielle Davis, art by Mags DeRoma
Published by Katherine Tegen Books
First line (over 4 spreads): To make a cake, gather, make, wait.
elements used: invokes the universal appeal of creating something
Whistling for Angela
By Robin Heald, art by Peggy Collins
Published by pajama press
First line: “I’m going to learn to whistle for the new baby,” said Daniel.
elements used: invokes the universal theme of siblings and family and the universal appeal of learning something new
ONLY ONE
By Deborah Hopkinson, art by Chuck Groenink
Published by anne schwartz books
First line: One. Only one. The story starts with one.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Our Playground Rules!
By Kalle George, art by Jay Fleck
Published by Rodale Kids
First line: Our playground rules!
elements used: makes the reader wonder something and makes a play on words
Patch of Sky
By Nic Yulo
Published by Dial Books for Young Readers
First line: “Look up, Pia. That is the sky.”
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Rumble and Roar
By Sue Fliess, art by Khoa Le
Published by Millbrook Press
First line: Sounds abound the world around.
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in
Double Puppy Trouble
By Danica McKellar, art by Josee Masse
Published by Crown Books for Young Readers
First line: Hello there, my friend! Are you ready to meet someone spunky, ambitious, and playfully sweet?
elements used: engages the reader and makes the reader wonder something
Children of the Forest
By Matt Myers
Published by Neal Porter Books
First line: We are wild.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Ten Owies
By Tony Johnston, art by Annabel Tempest
Published by Greenwillow Books
First line: Olivia loved ice cream.
elements used: references something with universal appeal
Always with You, Always with Me
By Jessica McKay, art by Kelly Rowland
Published by Viking
First line: Monday: My darling child, there is a part of the day that your eyes never see.
elements used: engages the reader and makes the reader wonder something
American Desi
By Jyoti Rajan Gopal, art by Supriya Kelkar
Published by Little, Brown and Company
First line: Festive henna, garnet red
Bindis, bangles, desi queen,
Fantasy hair, seafoam green…which is the color of me?
elements used: engages multiple senses
Kapaemahu
By Hinaleimoana Wong-Kalu, Dean Hamer, and Joe Wilson; art by Daniel Sousa
Published by Kokila
First line: (first in Hawaiian) Long ago, before Kakuhihewa ruled Oahu, four Tahitians journeyed across the ocean from their home in Moaulanuiakea to Hawaii.
elements used: invokes the universal appeal of an epic adventure
Apple Grumble
By Huw Lewis Jones, art by Ben Sanders
Published by Thames & Hudson
First line: This is Apple.
elements used: introduces the main character
I Won't Give Up My Rubber Band
By Shinsuke Yoshitake
Published by Chronicle Books
First line: Oh. A rubber band.
elements used: invokes the universal theme of discovery
Sometimes All I Need Is Me
By Juliana Perdomo
Published by Candlewick
First line: I live in a cozy place with my mom and Rumba, our dog.
elements used: invokes the universal appeal of home and family
The Notebook Keeper
By Stephen Briseno, art by Magdalena Mora
Published by Random House Studio
First line: Mama tells me we have a long way to walk.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Juna and Appa
By Jane Park, art by Felicia Hoshino
Published by Lee & Low Books
First line: Juna’s favorite day of the week was Saturday.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
The RUNAWAY PEA Washed Away
By Kjartan Poskitt, art by Alex Willmore
Published by Aladdin
First line: The washing-up’s finished, so out comes the plug, and the water goes down with a SWISH and a GLUG!
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story
Pruett and Soo
By Nancy Viau, art by Jorge Lacera
Published by two lions
First line: Planet Monochrome was a teeny tiny planet tucked between Saturn and Jupiter.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something and invokes the universal appeal of space
Frances in the Country
By Liz Garton Scanlon, art by Sean Qualls
Publisher: Neal Porter Books
First line: Frances is a city kid, but the city never seems quite right for Frances.
elements used: introduces the main character and their problem and hints at the universal theme of not fitting in
Color the Sky
By David Elliott, art by Evan Turk
Published by Little, Brown Books for Young Readers
First line: Red big.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something and introduces the concept
I AM A BABY
By Bob Shea
Published by Candlewick Press
First line: I am a baby and I am not sleepy.
elements used: introduces the main character and hints at a problem
Poopsie Gets Lost
By Hannah E. Harrison
Published by Dial Books for Young Readers
First line: Poopsie the cat sat on her cat bed.
elements used: introduces the main character and hints at the tone of the story
How To Be A
ROCK STAR
ROCK STAR
By Lisa Tolin, art by Daniel Duncan
Published by: G.P. Putnam’s Sons Books for Young Readers
First line: If you want to be a rock star… first you need a band.
elements used: references the universal appeal of being a rock star and hints at the tone of the story
If You Were A
GARBAGE TRUCK
GARBAGE TRUCK
By Diane C. Ohanesian, art by Joey Chou
Published by Random House Studio
First line: Honk! Honk! Beep! Beep! Cars and trucks race down the street.
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story and engages multiple senses
Room For More
By Michelle Kadarusman, art by Maggie Zeng
Published by pajama press
First line: Two wombats, Dig and Scratch, peered out from the tunnel of their burrow.
elements used: introduces unusual main characters and makes the reader wonder something
The New Rooster
By Rilla Alexander
Published by Simon & Schuster Books for Young Readers
First line: He’d come a long way.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
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