December 2022
(Every month, I check out 30 recently published picture books and share their first lines (and hooks, for NF).
Elements of a great first line
*makes the reader wonder something
*sets the tone for the story
*starts in the middle of the action
*hints at a universal theme
*establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story
*introduces the main character and their problem
(bonus points if the character is particularly unusual)
*subverts the reader's expectations
*makes the reader laugh
*sets the scene of the story
*hints at the how the story will end
*engages the reader
*engages multiple senses
*references a beloved classic
*hints at an unusual premise
*introduces the concept
*references something with universal appeal
*uses a play on words
Twinkle, Twinkle, Winter Night
By Megan Litwin, art by Nneka Myers
Published by Clarion Books
First line: Twinkle, twinkle, winter night.
Elements used: references a beloved classic and establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in
Click here to read about Megan's revision process for the first line.
So Much Snow
By Kristen Schroeder, art by Sarah Jacoby
Published by Random House Studio
First line: On Monday, it starts to snow.
Elements used: sets a tone for the story and hints at something with universal appeal
Click here to read about Kristen's revision process for the first line.
Strum & Drum
By Jashar Awan
Published by tundra
First line: The night was silent and still.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Super Santa
By Bruce Hale, art by Guy Francis
Published by Harper
First line: Hey-ho, here we go! It’s countdown time—just minutes away from Christmas Eve, the most magical night of the year.
Elements used: references something with universal appeal
Winter Lullaby
By Dianne White, art by Ramona Kaulitzki
Published by Candlewick Press
First line: Cool winds blow through graying skies.
Elements used: engages multiple senses
Tiny Reindeer
By Chris Naylor-Ballesteros
Published by tundra
First line: Tiny Reindeer was just like any other reindeer, but with one big difference.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
When Santa Came to Stay
By Billy Sharff, art by Eda Kaban
Published by Dial Books for Young Readers
First line: When Santa Claus came by last year, He liked our cookies so…He came again on New Year’s Eve and did not want to go.
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in, engages multiple senses, and references something with universal appeal
The Magical Christmas Store
By Maudie Powell-Tuck, art by Hoang Giang
Published by tiger tales
First line: Benji’s grandma had always said, “Magic happens on Christmas Eve.”
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
The Best Gift for Bear
By Jennifer A. Bell
Published by two lions
First line: Hedgehog had spent the morning decorating cookies for her friends and neighbors.
Elements used: references an activity with universal appeal
Once Upon A Christmas
By Dawn Young, art by Kenneth Anderson
Published by Worthy kids
First line: Once upon a Christmas, the Three Bears decided to host their first-ever Christmas Eve celebration.
Elements used: hints at a beloved classic and reference something with universal appeal
Just Be Claus
By Barbara Joosse, art by Kim Barnes
Published by Sleeping Bear Press
First line: Once upon a snowstorm, a jolly little, round little baby was born.
Elements used: subverts the readers expectations
Wishing Tree
By Meika Hashimoto, art by Xindi Yan
Published by Harper
First line: One frosty winter’s night, a boy named Theo gazed out his window.
Elements used: introduces the main character, makes the reader wonder something, and engages multiple senses
The Truth About Mrs. Claus
By Meena Harris, art by Keisha Morris
Published by Little, Brown and Company
First line: Amalia the Elf came from a long line of proud teddy-bear makers.
Elements used: references something with universal appeal and introduces a unique premise
Song for the Snow
By Jon-Erik Lappano, art by Byron Eggenshviler
Published by Groundwood Books
First line: In early winter, Freya dreamed of the snow.
Elements used: introduces the main character
The Christmas Mitzvah
By Jeff Gottesfeld, art by Michelle Laurentia Agatha
Published by Creston Books
First line: Al Rosen was a Jewish man who loved Christmas.
Elements used: introduces the main character and a unique premise
I Like the Snow
By Sarah Nelson, art by Rachel Oldfield
Published by Barefoot Books
First line: I like the snow—crunching underneath my toes, icy kisses on my nose, on my eyelids, chin and cheeks.
Elements used: engages multiple senses and establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in
My Friend Ben and the First Snow
By Charles Beyl
Published by Albert Whitman & Co
First line: I’m Chip, and this is my friend Ben.
Elements used: introduces the main character
Season of Light
By Jess Redman, art by Ramona Kaulitzki
Published by Farrar Straus Giroux
First line: After red and green dreams, we wake up before the sun.
Elements used: subverts the readers expectations and makes the reader wonder something
The Christmasaurus
By Tom Fletcher, art by Shane DeVries
Published by Random House
First line: Santa and his reindeer live as north as you can go, in a place that’s full of magic (and quite a lot of snow).
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in and references something with universal appeal
A Simple Christmas on the Farm
By Phyllis Alsdurf, art by Lisa Hunt
Published by Beaming Books
First line: When white frosts the barnyard fence posts and snow blankets cover the fields, when boughs on the pines hang heavy and snowdrifts pile next to the barn, that’s when we start to get ready for Christmas on the farm.
Elements used: engages multiple senses and references something with universal appeal
A Christmas Too Big
By Colleen Madden
Published by two lions
First line: FA LA LAAA! jingle jingle jingle jingle Bumpity Bumpity Bumpity Bumpity WOOO—YEAH!
Elements used: engages the reader and incorporates onomatopoeia
Hello, Tree
By Alastair Heim, art by Alisa Coburn
Published by little bee books
First line: Hello, tree.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something and subverts the reader's expectations
A Christmas Wish for You
By Lisa Swerling, art by Ralph Lazar
Published by Chronicle Books
First line (over two spreads): Each star you see on Christmas Eve…is a wish that’s come true for those who believe.
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in, references something with universal appeal, and establishes a unique premise
No Peeking at Presents
By Alastair Heim, art by Sara Not
Published by Clarion Books
First line: There. Everything looks perfectly merry.
Elements used: references something with universal appeal
COMET the Unstoppable Reindeer
By Jim Benton
Published by two lions
First line: ‘Twas the night before Christmas, a tense situation.
Elements used: references a beloved classic, establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in, and makes the reader wonder something
Twelve Dinging Doorbells
By Tameka Fryer Brown, art by Ebony Glenn
Published by Kokila
First line: At the first dinging doorbell this holiday I see…a sweetp potato pie just for me!
Elements used: references a beloved classic and establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in
Murray Christmas
By E.G. Keller
Published by Abrams Books for Young Readers
First line: Murray was a very good boy.
Elements used: introduces the main character and references a beloved phrase
The Christmas Pine
By Julia Donaldson, art by Victoria Sandoy
Published by Scholastic Press
First line: Once upon a time I stood.
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in and references a beloved classic
Christmas Fairies for Ouma
By LIndsey McDivitt, art by Katarzyna Bukiert
Published by Familius
First line: Tessa tugged off her red mittens.
Elements used: introduces the main character, engages multiple senses, and hints at the setting of the story
Evie's Christmas Wishes
By Siobhan Parkinson, art by Shannon Bergin
Published by Little Island
First line: Christmas is coming.
Elements used: introduces something with universal appeal
Through the North Pole Snow
By Polly Faber, art by Richard Jones
Published by Candlewick Press
First line: A little fox came hunting through the snow.
Elements used: introduces the main character, hints at the setting of the story, and makes the reader wonder something
Snow Horses
By Patricia MacLachlan, art by Micha Archer
Published by Margaret K. McElderry Books
First line: SNOW FALLING all day—all night. Drifting over meadows and gardens and roads.
Elements used: sets the scene of the story and engages multiple senses
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