August 2022
Every month, I check out 30 recently published picture books and share their first lines (and hooks, for NF).
Elements of a great first line
*makes the reader wonder something
*sets the tone for the story
*starts in the middle of the action
*hints at a universal theme
*establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story
*introduces the main character and their problem
(bonus points if the character is particularly unusual)
*subverts the reader's expectations
*sets the scene of the story
*hints at the how the story will end
*engages the reader
*engages multiple senses
*references a beloved classic
*hints at an unusual premise
*introduces the concept
*references something with universal appeal
All books in this collection were published in 2022.
The End
by John Bray, art by Josh Cleland
published by Starry Forrest Books
First line: Have a great summer! THE END.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something, hints at an unusual premise, and subverts the reader's expectations
Big Dreams Small Fish
by Paula Cohen
published by Levine Querido
First line: Shirley’s family had big dreams for their new store in their new neighborhood.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Cats Can
By Roseanne Greenfield Thong, art by Ebony Glenn
published by Viking Books for Young Readers
First line (over two spreads): Cats purr, cats dream, cats meow, cats scream!
elements used: introduces the main character and the concept, and incorporates multiple senses
KITTY
by rebecca jordan-glum
published by Roaring Brook Press
First line: “Don’t worry about a thing,” Granny said. “The cat will be just fine!”
elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Punky Aloha
by Shar Tuiasoa
published by Harper Collins
First line: Hi, I’m Punky!
elements used: introduces the main character
Again, Essie?
by Jenny Lacika, art by Teresa Martinez
published by Charlesbridge
First line: Rafael needs to protect his toys.
elements used: introduces the main character and his problem, and makes the reader wonder something
First Morning Sun
by Aimee Reid, art by Jing Jing Tsong
published by Beach Lane Books
First line: First morning sun.
elements used: introduces the concept and hints at a universal theme
I'd Like to be the Window for a Wise Old Dog
by Philip Stead
published by Doubleday Books for Young Readers
First line: Oh, I’d like to be the raindrop falling on a turtle shell
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in and introduces an unusual premise
Armadillo Antics
by Bill Martin Jr and Michael Sampson, art by Nathalie Beauvois
published by Brown Books Pub Group
First line: Now the day has ended, and the birds no longer fly.
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in and hints at a universal theme
Hundred Years of Happiness
by Thanhha Lai, art by Nguyen Quang and Kim Lien
published by HarperCollins
First line: Every day after school, An greets her grandparents in Vietnamese.
elements used: introduces the main character, uses the universal theme of routine, and makes the reader wonder something
Don't Eat Bees
by Dev Petty, art by Mike Boldt
published by Doubleday Books for Young Readers
First line: I am a smart dog.
elements used: introduces the main character, makes the reader wonder something, and subverts the reader's expectations
Most Perfect You
by Jazmyn Simon, art by Tamisha Anthony
published by Random House Books for Young Readers
First line: Irie ran down the stairs wearing her winter hat, her hair covered by the pink wool.
elements used: introduces the main character and hints at her problem, and incorporates multiple senses
Lizzy and the Cloud
by the Fan Brothers
published by Simon & Schuster Books for Young Readers
First line: It was Saturday.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something and hints at the universal appeal of the weekend
Roto and Roy Helicopter Heroes
by Sherri Duskey Rinker, art by Don Tate
published by Little, Brown Books for Young Readers
First line: As the sun begins to rise, brightening the morning skies: Thud-thud-thud-thud-thud!
elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in, incorporates multiple senses, and makes the reader wonder something
CARRIMEBAC
by David Barclay Moore, art by John Holyfield
published by Candlewick
First line: All the folks in Walkerton, Georgia, remembered the hot, sweaty afternoon when ol' Rootilla Redgums and her peculiar grandson strolled into town.
elements used: introduces the main character, makes the reader wonder something, and incorporates multiple senses
Nour's Secret Library
by Wafa' Tarnowska, art by Vali Mintzi
published by Barefoot Books
First line: There was a girl named Nour who lived in the city of Damascus, which was described by those who loved it as the "fragrant place."
elements used: introduces the main character and establishes the setting of the story
Molly on the Moon
by Mary Robinette Kowal, art by Diana Mayo
published by Roaring Brook Press
First line: Molly moved to the Moon.
elements used: introduces the main character, makes the reader wonder something, and subverts the reader's expectations
Papa Loves You, Tiny Blue
by Jo Empson
published by WorthyKids
First line: Tiny Blue was very little, but his head was filled with very BIG questions.
elements used: introduces the main character and hints at the universal theme of curiosity
Kat Hats
by Daniel Pinkwater, art by Aaron Renier
published by Harry N. Abrams
First line: Matt Katz is the president of Kat Hats Incorporated, a company in the old city of Pretzelburg.
elements used: introduces the main character, establishes an unusual setting and topic, and makes the reader wonder something
Mardi Gras Almost Didn't Come This Year
by Kathy Z Price, art by Carl Joe Williams
published by Atheneum Books for Young Readers
First line: Days before the storm, there was a burning-up sun.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something, incorporates multiple senses, and uses the universal theme of the weather
Peacock and Sketch
by Allan Peterkin, art by Sandhya Prabhat
published by Magination Press
First line: PEACOCK was the only peacock in the whole zoo, and he liked it that way.
elements used: introduces an unusual main character and establishes the setting
The Leaping Laddoo
by Harshita Jerath, art by Kamala M Nair
published by Albert Whitman & Company
First line: Today was Mr. Kapoor’s birthday, so Mrs. Kapoor decided to cook his favorite dessert.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something and references the universal appeal of birthdays and dessert
Just to See
by Morgane de Cadier, art by Florian Pige
published by Blue Dot Kids Press
First line: I know the forest inside out.
elements used: makes the reader wonder something and references the universal appeal of knowledge
I Want My Book Back
By VIviane Elbee, art by Nicole Miles
published by little bee books
First line: Daryl loved only one book.
elements used: introduces the main character and makes the reader wonder something
Star Fishing
by Sang-Keun Kim
published by Harry N. Abrams
First line: It’s the kind of night when you just can’t fall asleep.
elements used: engages the reader and references the universal theme of sleeplessness
I Want to Be a Vase
by Julio Torres, art by Julian Glander
published by Atheneum Books for Young Readers
First line: Hi. I have something to say.
elements used: introduces an unusual main character
The Lantern House
by Erin Napier, art by Adam Trest
published by Little, Brown Books for Young Readers
First line: I am a brand-new house, and I glow like a lantern in the night.
elements used: introduces an unusual character and appeals to the universal theme of home
Anansi and the Golden Pot
by Taiye Selasi, art by Tinuke Fagorun
published by DK Children
First line: There was once a little boy whose name was Kweku, but everyone called him Anansi.
elements used: introduces the main character and references a beloved classic
How to Hug a Pufferfish
By Ellie Peterson
published by Roaring Brook Press
First line: So you want to hug a pufferfish.
elements used: engages the reader, subverts the reader's expectations, and establishes a unique premise
Something Happened to My Dad
by Ann Hazzard adn Vivianna Aponte Rivera, art by Gloira Felix
published by Magination Press
First line: Carmen’s father was a magician.
elements used: references the universal appeal of magic
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