October 2022
Every month, I check out 30 recently published picture books and share their first lines (and hooks, for NF).
Elements of a great first line
*makes the reader wonder something
*sets the tone for the story
*starts in the middle of the action
*hints at a universal theme
*establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story
*introduces the main character and their problem
(bonus points if the character is particularly unusual)
*subverts the reader's expectations
*makes the reader laugh
*sets the scene of the story
*hints at the how the story will end
*engages the reader
*engages multiple senses
*references a beloved classic
*hints at an unusual premise
*introduces the concept
*references something with universal appeal
*uses a play on words
So Not Ghoul
By Karen Yin, art by Bonnie Lui
Published by Page Street Kids
First line: Mimi doesn’t look like the other ghosts—but she wishes she did.
Elements used: introduces a unique main character and her problem
A Spoonful of Frogs
By Casey Lyall, art by Vera Brosgol
Published by Greenwillow Books
First line: A witch’s favorite treat is Frog Soup.
Elements used: subverts the reader’s expectations
If Animals Trick-or-Treated
By Ann Whitford Paul, art by David Walker
Published by Farrar, Straus and Giroux
First line: If animals trick-or-treated, Mama and Owlet at the pumpkin stall would first choose a pumpkin like Owlet—small.
Elements used: references an activity with universal appeal
Happy Owl-Oween!
By Laura Gehl, art by Lydia Nichols
Published by Abrams
First line: Pumpkins to pick. Ghost pops to lick. Neighbors to trick. Happy Owl-oween!
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in and hints at activities with universal appeal
A Costume for Charly
By CK Malone, art by Alejandra Barajas
Published by Beaming Books
First line: Each Halloween, Charly couldn't’ decide weather to be fabulous or frightening.
Elements used: references a holiday with universal appeal and a universal dilemma
If Your Babysitter Is A Bruja
By Ana Siqueira, art by Irena Freitas
Published by Simon & Schuster Books for Young Readers
First line: If it’s almost Halloween and you have a new babysitter…be wary.
Elements used: references a holiday with universal appeal and makes the reader wonder something
There's a Witch in Your Book
By Tom Fletcher, art by Greg Abbott
Published by Random House
First line: Eeek! There’s a WITCH in your book!
Elements used: Engages the reader and makes the reader wonder something
Hardly Haunted
By Jessica Sima
Published by Simon & Schuster Books for Young Readers
First line: There was a house on a hill, and that house was worried.
Elements used: introduces an unusual main character and makes the reader wonder something
Boo Stew
By Donna L. Washington, art by Jeffrey Ebbeler
Published by Peachtree
First line: There were always Scares in Toadsuck Swamp, but Curly Locks didn't pay 'em much mind.
Elements used: introduces the main character, establishes the setting and the tone, and makes the reader wonder something
There's a Rock Concert in my Bedroom
By Kevin Jonas and Danielle Jonas, art by Courtney Dawson
Published by Razorbill
First line: Emma loves music.
Elements used: introduces the main character and references the universal appeal of music
Eggasaurus
By Jennifer Wagh, art by Hallie Bateman
Published by Simon & Schuster Books for Young Readers
First line: Dear Customer, Thank you for your Eggasaurus purchase.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something and establishes an unusual premise
Eighteen Vats of Water
By Ji-Li Jiang, art by Nadia Hsich
Published by Creston Books
First line: Long, long ago, there was no written language in China.
Elements used: establishes the setting
The More You Give
By Marcy Campbell, art by Francesca Sanna
Published by Alfred A. Knopf
First line: Once there was a wide-open field and a boy who loved his grandmother, who loved him back.
Elements used: hints at the universal theme of family
Sangeet and the Missing Beat
By Kiranjot Kaur
Published by Rebel Mountain Press
Fist line: Sangeet loves music.
Elements used: introduces the main character and references something with universal appeal
Thursday
By Ann Bonwill, art by Kayla Harren
Published by two lions
First line: They told her on a Thursday
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
The World Belonged to US
By Jacqueline Woodson, art by Leo Espinosa
Published by Nancy Paulsen Books
First line: In Brooklyn in the summer not so long ago grownups always had someplace to be or some kind of work to do, but the minute school ended, us kids were free as air.
Elements used: establishes the setting, references something with universal appeal (out-of-school time)
Why Not You?
By Ciara and Russell Wilson, art by Jessica Gibson
Published by Random House
First line: Is there something that you dream of?
Elements used: engages the reader and references the universal theme of dreams
If You Find A Leaf
By aimee sicuro
Published by Random House Studio
First line (over two spreads): If you find a leaf you could dream the day away.
Elements used: engages the reader and references an activity with universal appeal
Granny's Kitchen
By Sade Smith, art by Ken Daley
Published by Feiwei and Friends
First line: Shelly-Ann Lived on the beautiful island of Jamaica, where the sun is always shining and the weather is sweet.
Elements used: introduces the main character and establishes the setting
BLUR
By Minh Le, art by Dan Santat
Published by Alfred A. Knopf
First line: From the beginning, there was something different about this child.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Wondering Around
By Meg Fleming, art by Richard Jones
Published by Beach Lane Books
First line: WONDER out the window.
Elements used: engages the reader and employs a play on words
Scrap Metal Swan:
A River Clean-Up Story
A River Clean-Up Story
By Joanne Linden, art by Estrellita Caracol
Published by Barefoot Books
First line: River clean-up, springtime chore.
Elements used: establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in and hints at a universal chore
Is This Your Class Pet
By Troy Cummings
Published by Random House
First line: Dear people at school, WOOF!!
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something and establishes the setting
This Book Is Not For You!
By Shannon Hale, art by Tracy Subisak
Published by Dial Books for Young Readers
First line: Stanley hopped on his bike and zoomed through the cornfield.
Elements used: references an activity with universal appeal and introduces the main character
Hurry, Little Tortoise, Time for School!
By Carrie Finison, art by Erub Kraan
Published by Random House Studio
First line: Guess what day it is!
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something
Wake, Sleepy One
By Lisa Kerr, art by Lisa Powell Braun
Published by West Margin Press
First line: In the desert, a winter frost melts.
Elements used: references the universal theme of nature
Basking in My Brown
By Fatima Faisal, art by Anain Shaikh
Published by Modern Marigold Books
First line: Sweet summertime.
Elements used: references the universal appeal of summer
Stanley the Dog
First Day of School
First Day of School
By Bobby Bones, art by Stephanie Laberis
Published by Harper
First line: From the moment Stanley woke up, his belly felt burbly, his legs felt wobbly, and his tongue felt tangled.
Elements used: makes the reader wonder something, introduces the main character, and subverts the reader’s expectations
Little Red and the Big Bad Editor
By Rebecca Kraft Rector, art by Shanda McCloskey
Published by Aladdin
First line: Little Red was pleased as punch.
Elements used: references a beloved classic, introduces the main character, sets the tone for the story, and makes the reader wonder something
Ride, Roll, Run
Time for Fun
Time for Fun
By Valerie Bolling, art by Sabrena Khadija
Published by Abrams Appleseed
First line: School’s done!
Elements used: hints at something with universal appeal (out-of-school time)
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